THIS IS EXCELLENTLY WRITTEN, BUT YOU HAVEN’T QUITE FOLLOWED THE RUBRIC OF THE TASK. YOU HAVE TREATED THE OPENING LINE METATEXTUALLY, AND COMMENTED ON IT INSTEAD OF CONTINUING IT.
HOWEVER, IT REALLY WAS EXCELLENTLY EXPRESSED. SOMEHOW I GET THE IMPRESSION THAT IT IS AUTOBIOGRAPHICAL… IF IT ISN’T, THEN YOU MANAGE TO CONVEY SOMEONE ELSE’S FEELINGS VERY WELL INDEED.
I'm not good at others + I'm narcissistic, so I guess that leaves me with the first option and with an impression that the reader is s o m e w h a t better at others (that's a challange, haha).
I am my own medium, there is nothing outside of that.
only creation from the self
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